Sergio's comment from me

This week we commented on Sergio's story this is what I wrote.

Great story very descriptive I felt like I was there. some parts were a bit silly like “R.I.P. Porky” and “Bam a tennis ball in the face” but apart from that it was an amazing story I thought it was the best writing of yours that I have read.

The Haunted Old House

The cast iron gates swung silently open as I approached. Gravel crunched underfoot as I passed through. The long grass almost hid the weather beaten tombstones that were dotted around the vast paddock. As I drew closer to the house it cast its shadowy veil over me, shielding me from the icy glare of the full moon.

The steps were worn smooth with years of usage. The heavy oak doors were cracked with age but I could see they were still very strong. As I reached for the handle the doors creaked open revealing smothering darkness inside its gaping maw.